The Smoking Lamp - Alt Marvel's Exiles #1
Smoking Lamp #54
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The lamp is lit...
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Imprint: Alternate Marvel
Series: The Exiles #1
Author: Hoang Thai
Title: "Morning Stars"
This is the Smoking Lamp’s first visit to the worlds of Alternate Marvel.
As anyone who has read my fan fic can attest, I heartily endorse the use of Footnotes or Endnotes to give the reader additional information. They take the place of editor’s note boxes that used to appear throughout stories and were much more prevalent when I was a much younger comics reader. Good to see them used here. One problem with the Endnotes is that some of the references aren’t complete, example #3… see Marvel's ??? and #6… Alternate Marvel's Deadpool #?!. If the Endnote/Footnotes are going to be used, they really need to be complete references.
Hmm, a SHIELD higher up making sure that she is referred to as ma’am over an interagency communication. Hmm, could it be…I’ll wait.
The Bullet Biker…hmm, interesting character choice. He has a Hawkeye connection. Could we see an appearance by everyone’s favorite Marvel archer at a future point?
The “Stupid guy, he thought, as if get married in the first place” line sort of stops down the story. The line looks like it is missing a piece or like an incomplete thought.
Shouldn’t Bullet Biker’s arm-mounted laser cannon have lost its electronics at the same time the SHIELD EMP took out his bike?
Like the Beetle hatred being brought to the table by Leila Davis, aka Hardshell/Beetle II…or is she III, looks like the groundwork is set for a crossover fight between these Exiles and the Thunderbolts. I like the SHIELD stealth suit employed on the AIM island base when the girl is retrieved.
Conrad Josten has some interesting baggage and backstory. And another link in the possible Thunderbolts crossover appears. Hope that when he encounters his brother, Erik, it isn’t just a fight and then everything is fine. There are some weighty issues here between the two characters that could make for some dramatic storytelling.
Cool hero piece for Conrad, coming to the defense of the target of the uniformed SHIELD agents.
Hmm, wonder if Agent Sayer is going to be an ongoing influence on the team or if he is actually going to be a member of the Exiles.
May be beating the “poor” Conrad drum a little hard. Conrad rudimenting about his past is one thing, but then shifting focus a paragraph or three later and having Agent Sayer doing the same thing is a little much.
Nomad, huh. Hmm, I’ve always liked Jack Monroe.
The government/political conspiracy elements of this story could be interesting.
I’ll be back.
I give it 4.5 out of 10.
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The lamp is extinguished...Steady as she goes.
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puff
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The lamp is lit...
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Imprint: Alternate Marvel
Series: The Exiles #1
Author: Hoang Thai
Title: "Morning Stars"
This is the Smoking Lamp’s first visit to the worlds of Alternate Marvel.
As anyone who has read my fan fic can attest, I heartily endorse the use of Footnotes or Endnotes to give the reader additional information. They take the place of editor’s note boxes that used to appear throughout stories and were much more prevalent when I was a much younger comics reader. Good to see them used here. One problem with the Endnotes is that some of the references aren’t complete, example #3… see Marvel's ??? and #6… Alternate Marvel's Deadpool #?!. If the Endnote/Footnotes are going to be used, they really need to be complete references.
Hmm, a SHIELD higher up making sure that she is referred to as ma’am over an interagency communication. Hmm, could it be…I’ll wait.
The Bullet Biker…hmm, interesting character choice. He has a Hawkeye connection. Could we see an appearance by everyone’s favorite Marvel archer at a future point?
The “Stupid guy, he thought, as if get married in the first place” line sort of stops down the story. The line looks like it is missing a piece or like an incomplete thought.
Shouldn’t Bullet Biker’s arm-mounted laser cannon have lost its electronics at the same time the SHIELD EMP took out his bike?
Like the Beetle hatred being brought to the table by Leila Davis, aka Hardshell/Beetle II…or is she III, looks like the groundwork is set for a crossover fight between these Exiles and the Thunderbolts. I like the SHIELD stealth suit employed on the AIM island base when the girl is retrieved.
Conrad Josten has some interesting baggage and backstory. And another link in the possible Thunderbolts crossover appears. Hope that when he encounters his brother, Erik, it isn’t just a fight and then everything is fine. There are some weighty issues here between the two characters that could make for some dramatic storytelling.
Cool hero piece for Conrad, coming to the defense of the target of the uniformed SHIELD agents.
Hmm, wonder if Agent Sayer is going to be an ongoing influence on the team or if he is actually going to be a member of the Exiles.
May be beating the “poor” Conrad drum a little hard. Conrad rudimenting about his past is one thing, but then shifting focus a paragraph or three later and having Agent Sayer doing the same thing is a little much.
Nomad, huh. Hmm, I’ve always liked Jack Monroe.
The government/political conspiracy elements of this story could be interesting.
I’ll be back.
I give it 4.5 out of 10.
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The lamp is extinguished...Steady as she goes.
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puff
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